DeletedUser13405
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god61...there is so much material here I have no idea where to start. So, I will keep it substantive to avoid any personal attacks.
When writing a news story, its is of critical importance to directly quote the people you interview properly or else nobody will speak to you. Thaunit/mango97 both had very interesting things to say about the war and you summarized their statements rather than direct quote them. Big mistake.
Secondly, real journalism is about reporting the facts, soliciting multiple points of view from different perspectives and making the reader care enough to finish the article. Leave your own commentary for the Op/Ed section. Thats where you can say anything you please.
Thirdly, there are some real stories out there about this war. What happended to Kadjayuni, leader of Pheno? He led Pheno for over a year and now, in the most serious challenge Pheno ever faced, he disappears? How about bowzer (the #2 ranked player in beta)? A multi-accounting charge by thaunit? Thats serious stuff and your work on reporting the news so far does it no justice. If you want to tell the war story, you need to look deeper.
The story IS interesting, especially to those of us only marginally involved.
For example...the boasting beta should come out with Issue #1 with 4 sections. The main section detailing general news about beta and the war, a feature story such as what happened to kad told from multiple perspectives (Pheno and the alliances fighting Pheno), the Op/Ed section (you, as editor, get the main section here, but you may also want to ask an alliance leader to submit a written piece per issue) and a Stats section (post a complete list of world war stats). Those sections will take time to initially compile.
I would like to take on the project myself, but I have not got the time. And for heavens sakes, please run the issue through a spellchecker/grammarchecker before posting it.
When writing a news story, its is of critical importance to directly quote the people you interview properly or else nobody will speak to you. Thaunit/mango97 both had very interesting things to say about the war and you summarized their statements rather than direct quote them. Big mistake.
Secondly, real journalism is about reporting the facts, soliciting multiple points of view from different perspectives and making the reader care enough to finish the article. Leave your own commentary for the Op/Ed section. Thats where you can say anything you please.
Thirdly, there are some real stories out there about this war. What happended to Kadjayuni, leader of Pheno? He led Pheno for over a year and now, in the most serious challenge Pheno ever faced, he disappears? How about bowzer (the #2 ranked player in beta)? A multi-accounting charge by thaunit? Thats serious stuff and your work on reporting the news so far does it no justice. If you want to tell the war story, you need to look deeper.
The story IS interesting, especially to those of us only marginally involved.
For example...the boasting beta should come out with Issue #1 with 4 sections. The main section detailing general news about beta and the war, a feature story such as what happened to kad told from multiple perspectives (Pheno and the alliances fighting Pheno), the Op/Ed section (you, as editor, get the main section here, but you may also want to ask an alliance leader to submit a written piece per issue) and a Stats section (post a complete list of world war stats). Those sections will take time to initially compile.
I would like to take on the project myself, but I have not got the time. And for heavens sakes, please run the issue through a spellchecker/grammarchecker before posting it.